
There’s blood everywhere. Some from the gash on my forehead. Some from the cuts I can only feel. Lying on broken glass isn’t just painful. It’s a feeling that’s unexplainable. Especially when you’ve been tossed into the air and have landed hard on a carpet of sharp, jagged pieces. I can’t see right. The impact has shaken my brain, blood drips into one eye. There’s smoke. I’m suffocating inside my helmet.
I have to take it off. I need some air. The clasp is eating into my chin. My fingers pinch and pull at the plastic. My head is finally free. Now the glass is digging into my scalp.
God help me.
I must move. But there’s so much pain. That’s when I hear my name.
Terry.
I lie still. The voice is familiar. Where did it come from? Please someone speak again.
Terry.
There. I know who it is. We were riding together. Everything was normal. We were alright. Right before that car swerved into our lane. It was bright red and too fast. That’s all I remember. He’s close by. My elbows are my legs now. They’ll drag me to him. Little by little, I move forward.
Terry.
I hear him again and tell him I’m coming. His legs. I can see his legs. Just a little more. The pain makes me vomit. More blood. I’m going to die. But not before I see his beautiful face. I can do this. The glass is behind me and the road is kinder. My body suddenly feels lighter. I’m almost there.
I see his head. Where’s his helmet? His eyes are open, staring at nothing.
Oh my God. He’s dead.
The red car explodes behind me. My ears are ringing. But I hear him again.
You’re safe now. Goodbye Terry.
Wow, Terveen. Beautifully sad. Your descriptions are so vivid. Fortunately, I’ve never experienced an accident like that, but your words feel so accurate. As per usual, you create a detailed world and characters in so few words, still leaving the reader to experience the said and the unsaid in their own way. Brilliant.
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Thank you so much, Britta. I love it when the reader adds their own bits and pieces of imagination. It gives the story so many wonderful angles and allows it to blossom in different directions. The unsaid is definitely more exciting. 🙂
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
I had an accident so I can imagine what might have happened. People don’t come to the rescue, only become spectators. Thanks for this wonderful story, dear Terveen! ❤️
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
I can very well understand the horror of becoming a spectacle for others. And an accident can be one of the worst case scenarios. I’m glad that you are alright, Jane. Keep smiling and writing. 🙂
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Yes, I’m happy for that. Thank you, dear Terveen! 😊
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
[…] Goodbye Terry by Terveen Gill — Gobblers / Masticadores // Editores: Manuela Timofte / j re crivel… […]
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
That’s very clever – quite the twist at the end, Terveen (although not surprising, being that you wrote this!)
❤
David
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Thank you so much, David. What’s life or a story without a good twist? Though the former may be tougher to handle. Haha. 🙂
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
This is chilling. I’ve been in a couple of accidents and recall the confusion and sense of dissociation in the immediate aftermath. It took a while for things to settle down to where I could process things normally (a few minutes). But this tale is brutal and so well written and takes everything a few steps further. You’re so adept at these dark themes, Terveen, and even these brief flash-fiction pieces snare the reader in a death-grip. Well done! 🙂
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
I’m sorry that you have been through something like this, Mike. It’s such a helpless feeling. I think stories always shine brighter when they are darker. Or that could be the morbid side of me talking. But then, which writer is really a happy camper? My hand is glued to my side. Haha! Thank you always and so so much! 🙂
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
A gripping piece with a surprising and sad ending. A terrifying situation. A second can change everything. Well done, Terveen.
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Thank you so much, Michele. Yes, all it takes is a second. Quite scary. 🙂
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Pain, terror, trauma, sadness, so beautifully expressed,
that too, in a few short lines. I actually felt her pain. Well done Terveen!
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Thank you so much, Diti! I’m glad that the emotions came through. It’s a terrifying situation. 🙂
Me gustaMe gusta
Wow, even if short, the story makes an impact. Well done, Terveen. Excellent writing.
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Thanks so much, Shobana. I appreciate the encouragement. Means a lot. 🙂
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
You are welcome my friend.
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Yikes! You get the most out of each and every word.
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Haha! Thanks a lot Geoff! And every word says thank you. 🙂
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
Oh my goodness, misty-eyed here, Terveen. What a tragic and compelling write. You’ve captured the essence of humanity folding in on itself, time becomes imperceptible, and life is quickly slipping away, while memories linger. I love this write, my dear friend. ☺️
Me gustaLe gusta a 1 persona
I love how you say this, Jeff. It sounds so poetic, sad, and beautiful. Memories are often the cushions that we can fall back upon. Thank you always and so much! 🙂
Me gustaMe gusta