Disco Lights by Terveen Gill

I have always wanted to go to the disco. There’s something about flashing lights and deafening music that makes me feel like the world isn’t so bad, people aren’t the reckless beings that they show themselves to be. And my brother isn’t the demon that lurks in the shadows waiting for me to sleep at night, arriving at midnight with his sour breath and clammy hands, his eyes balls of white with no expression or recognition of who I am.

It’s my duty to lie still and silent. Not a word nor a shudder, or he marks me with his might, red bruises that eventually turn purple, my dead mother’s favorite color. The sadness and pain last till he doesn’t leave before the crack of dawn, afraid that his wife might find out about his wrongdoings.

But I made a resolve this morning that it would have to end. No more terror or torture. I was a girl with guts and there weren’t many like me. So I would have to stand up for a greater cause. I would have to prove that evil never stands a chance in the face of solid determination.

He comes at exactly twelve, his steps drag against the floor, his breathing is erratic and heavy. Instead of waiting in bed, I stand at an open window, the cold breeze entangles itself in my hair. My name sounds repulsive on his lips. I will wipe them clean before I end this.

I sense him reaching for my shoulder. The bottle of acid trembles in my gloved hands, but I turn and splash his face liberally. I gag at the smell of burning skin, his screams are high-pitched and cowardly. I turn on some music and crank it to full volume. There are flashing lights in the distance. Two police cars are almost here. I called them ten minutes ago.

My hips sway to the music. My eyes take in the flashing colors. This is the nearest I will ever get to a disco.

I then jump out the window.

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  1. Sheesh! Into the waiting arms of the lovely policemen. We’ll catch you miss……

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      Or maybe plunged to her death. Free at last… A heavy price paid.
      I like your optimism, Don. 🙂

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      1. I like the policemen option……

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    2. tony espino dice:

      I love your revenge stories. They’re so satisfying. The connection between the disco lights and the police lights is also pretty wonderful. Was half expecting a twist of a building going up across the street for a new disco as she’s plunging to her death. Awesome stuff, Terveen!

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      1. Terveen Gill dice:

        I really like the idea of a new disco opening up across the street. So near yet so far. Thanks a lot for the wonderful words, Tony. They mean a lot. And revenge is so satisfying. 🙂

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  2. Excellent! The twist is amazing. Very clever how you have used a disco to describe her angst, especially the reference to the first para in the the last para. Very will written as always Terveen.

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      Thank you so much, Vignesh. Disco lights have been stuck in my head for some time. I wanted to do something different with them. 🙂

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  3. So well written, but what a terribly sad story

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      It really is. Thank you so much. 🙂

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  4. haoyando dice:

    Wow, what a powerful story and it really stirs my memory about all those dark secrets of family life that we bury in our heart. Love your stories, always.

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      Thank you so much, Haoyan. Those dark secrets haunt us till our last breaths. Many victims never speak up and many are never heard.

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      1. BBYCGN dice:

        Love how it all comes together in a original masterpiece. One of my favorite Flash Fiction stories by you.

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      2. Terveen Gill dice:

        Wow! Thank you! Means a lot. 🙂

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  5. Rae Cod dice:

    Phew, that was a dark one…it will stay with me a while, just as a good story should.

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      Thank you, Rae. There’s a lot of darkness in this world.

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  6. johnlmalone dice:

    ghoulish but not gratuitous —

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      I agree, John. Like you said – some have it so bad…

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  7. No way out for the girl, how tragic. An obnoxious couth and his deserving death. Well done, Terveen.

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      Thank you so much, Shobana. It’s really unimaginable.

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      1. You are welcome, Terveen.

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  8. Jeff Flesch dice:

    Oh, noooooo.:…

    Wow, Terveen, you had me there, and had me good. I was ready with a celebratory comment, and then the jump…what a wonderfully crafted and delivered story and experience you’ve provided us with. You are so talented. I’m stunned. Well done, my friend. ☺️

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      Thank you so much, Jeff. I just had to bring out the trauma of the girl. To me it seemed like years of hurt squeezed into a single moment. Your lovely words and support are so dear to me. Take care and have a wonderful weekend. 🙂

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      1. Jeff Flesch dice:

        You’re most welcome, Terveen. Mmm. You did bring that trauma out, and did it in such an elegant way, was such a treat. Well, after I got over the surprise! Haha. I’m glad this is so, my dear friend, I feel the exact same way about your words and support. Thank you. A very blissful weekend to you. 😊

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  9. Scary good. Anyone who reads your posts is likely smart enough not to mess with you! Your endings are hard to predict.

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    1. Terveen Gill dice:

      Thank you so much, Geoff. It’s so easy to be anyone or anything in fiction. But there’s always that spark somewhere. 🙂

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